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go down the street
losing all my feathers.
bad quality vest
©2008-2009 ~herulor
:iconherulor:

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:iconb1gfan:
very interetsing!
:iconzoikoilove:
uh...haikus are in the format of 3 lines in measurements based on syllables. the first line having 5 syllables, the second line having 7 syllables, and the third having 5 syllables. yours is 4,6,5. no offense. just letting you know.

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is it religion
if it makes you go against
your very nature
:iconherulor:
heh

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fear the dreams
:iconherulor:
we know how to count,
all know that definition:
no information

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fear the dreams
:iconzoikoilove:
oh okay. so you DO know 'City haiku No.10' isn't a haiku. i was just checking.
a good attempt tho.

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is it religion
if it makes you go against
your very nature
:iconesin:
I like the humor of this piece. What do you think of reversing the first two lines;

all my feathers
going down the street
bad quality vest


As always, I love your work. :)
:iconherulor:
thank you
i've liked your version better tho :p

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fear the dreams
:iconesin:
You can use it if you want to.
You could hide this conversation, and noone would be the wiser. ;)

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